Capítulo 33 Eles aumentaram o calor

Nice continuation—this flows well and keeps the tension high. A few thoughts and light edits to tighten and avoid repetition, in case you’re looking for polish:

  1. Repetition at the end

You have Mike saying essentially the same line twice:

  • Early:

    "Okay then." He hit record. "Let's st...

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